Short story

guss

Hi all, my wife has just written a short story, it would be really appreciated if you could take time out to read it and vote.
Now you know my real name lol. Do you like the story, please leave your comments,
Thank you all.
Whooops here is the link http://bigwowweebooks.com/profiles/blogs/short-story-competition-2011-222

voting link http://bigwowweebooks.com/page/short-story-voting Deborah Louise Blake: The glow of the soul

Lexi

guss wrote:

Hi all, my wife has just written a short story, it would be really appreciated if you could take time out to read it and vote.
Now you know my real name lol. Do you like the story, please leave your comments,
Thank you all.

Sure - but where do we find this said story??????

Or am I missing something ?:)

guss

thanks for pointing that out ..................lol........... need to edit -{

thesecretagent

Nice concept - not my sort of thing though. The first two-thirds flows well, but feels a little rushed towards the end. There are also quite few grammatical errors and the odd mis-use of word (ie patients should be patience) which should be addressed before submission.
Best of luck to her. -{

guss

Thank you for your comment, if its not your kind of thing then i dont think you are qualified to comment on it. fortunately i have had fantastic feedback from other people, who enjoyed the story very much.

Mrs Guss

Sir Miles

guss wrote:

Thank you for your comment, if its not your kind of thing then i dont think you are qualified to comment on it. fortunately i have had fantastic feedback from other people, who enjoyed the story very much.

Mrs Guss

You asked for his opinion - he gave it. You could have left it at that.

Lexi

Sir Miles wrote:

guss wrote:

Thank you for your comment, if its not your kind of thing then i dont think you are qualified to comment on it. fortunately i have had fantastic feedback from other people, who enjoyed the story very much.

Mrs Guss

You asked for his opinion - he gave it. You could have left it at that.

I agree - in fact I think it's critical to get feedback from such a diverse panel, such as here (and that is all it is...not criticism) for something like a piece of work that is going to be judged and voted on.

I thought tsa brought to your attention something that could be marked against..... common spelling mistakes.

I work in the book/publishing business, and trust me - people are ruthless with things like that, and I would assume that a website such as it was submitted too, would be the same.

Perhaps you should have said - "please read this, but only post nice comments"

thesecretagent

guss wrote:

Thank you for your comment, if its not your kind of thing then i dont think you are qualified to comment on it. fortunately i have had fantastic feedback from other people, who enjoyed the story very much.

Mrs Guss

It's great you've had fantastic feedback. Unfortuanately copy-editors, agents and publishers all read work that isn't their personal choice, but they have to look at it objectively and check for basic mistakes. Taking criticsm is a huge part of writing, so you'd better get used to it and learn from it. Fortuanately I feel that I am mildly qualified to talk about this, if not the genre of your piece. My book's ISBN number is 190166822-3 and you'll find it still for sale by most large outlets, where it has been for the past twelve years.
As I said before best of luck. -{

guss

JUST TO LET YOU ALL KNOW THAT IT IS MY WIFE, MRS GUSS, not me writting these comments, thank you-{