I think the story is coming along nicely. :007)
To be honest I like my idea of the horse disguised as/in a shithouse better than the winged horse. I'll see if I can develop it by tomorrow.
On the other hand I didn't quite get the who-played-who game in the gambling house first time I read it. I'm quite quick on the uptake if you only give me enough time
Have a look back at the PTS and see what you think now.
I think the story is coming along nicely. :007)
To be honest I like my idea of the horse disguised as/in a shithouse better than the winged horse. I'll see if I can develop it by tomorrow.
On the other hand I didn't quite get the who-played-who game in the gambling house first time I read it. I'm quite quick on the uptake if you only give me enough time
Have a look back at the PTS and see what you think now.
I still don't like the winged horse.
The comment on Octopussy's father needs work, I think.
Octopussy: "Most pleased I am to see thee. Many years ago you let my dear father hang himself, not trying to halt him in any way. I am ever thankful."
sir James: (Some comment that shows his confusion about why she is thankful)
The comment about Cockburn is plagued with censoring. You have to write c**k-up.
That'll be it. Feel free to play around with the winged horse bit! And I've changed the dialogue a bit when Octopussy meets Sir James, to include what you and TP said.
Sir James gallops towards the circus astride his trusty steed, but is stopped by a lieutenant of the new territories' army.
Lieutenant: Romeo, Romeo, is that an Alpha, Romeo?
Sir James: Yes, repaired it has been since the Modicum of Comfort's PCS. Now, Prithee, lead me directly to the base commander.
Lieutenant: Sire, not while I'm on my watch.
Sir James: Then stand aside, lest thy trainers too be rent asunder for studying thy watch too long.
(With that Sir James departs at speed. Lieutenants search in vain, as Sir James hastily ducks into a travelling caravan, emerging moments later as a Jester. Sir James heads into the circus).
Sir James: Oh silvered winged man, is that cannon?
Silver winged man: No, sir James, 'tis by a most grievous continuation author so must not be considered canon. Pray ask the base commander yonder.
Base commander: Sir Jester! Is it you that's known as Thunderpu... Thunderpu...
Sir James: Nay, tis I, Sir James! Lady Octopussy (for I have no trouble with thine Scottish censorman), thrice-crossed thou hast been by Prince Kamal and General Orloff. A keg of gunpowder is moments from rendering this place asunder!
Sir James runs towards the keg as a melee ensues. He is seized upon, but the Lady Octopussy dismantles the cabinet into which the keg is fitted. Screams descend upon the crowd, followed by hush, as Sir James grapples with the fuse... the sweat from his brow snuffs the fuse like a candle at Vespers. (Whoever she may be.) Sir James and Lady Octopussy depart.
If anyone is up for doing another, the suggestion is "Permission To Slay". I'm pretty played out, if you'll pardon the pun, for the moment so over to you guys for material.
Act 3, Scene 1. Across the river and into the trees, into the house of a great bard (though not the greatest).
Sir Miles: A simple enquiry, Naught Naught Seven: what ist thine intent?
Sir James: The killers I must find, for Lord Felix ist mine friend.
Sir Miles: Spare me such sentiment, in another country shouldst thee be.
Sir James: Nay, sire, the breaking point I have not reached.
Sir Miles: ‘Tis a farewell to arms for thee. The end of something this most surely ist.
Sir James: Nay, ‘tis the night before battle. (Exit Sir James with his sword)
Sir Miles: There is no hunting like the hunting of man, and those who have hunted armed men long enough and liked it, never care for anything else thereafter.
First of all - shouldn't Sanchez be a opium smugler?
And Sharky, couldn't he simply be named "Not Quarrel"?
During the wedding, someone (Leiter?) should ask Bond why he's so intensely jolly. So much it almost seems creepy?
Bond replies that he senses he'll be non-stop angry for the short-time future, so he feels he should compensate.
In Act 2, Scene 1, Leiter says to Bond: -Think nothing of it, Sir James. You merely caught me looking guilty in the lone company of a very attractive young lady on my wedding day. Let us rejoin the party!
Act 3, Scene 2: When Countess Bouvier comments on the size of sir Bond's weapon, he should react almost word for word as a President might react when the size of his body parts are put into question :v
After they escape and ride off, Bond says they have to stop because their horses are out of hay need to stap to graze.
Bouvier: "Out of hay?" I haven't heard that one since I was a virgin ...
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Have a look back at the PTS and see what you think now.
I still don't like the winged horse.
The comment on Octopussy's father needs work, I think.
Octopussy: "Most pleased I am to see thee. Many years ago you let my dear father hang himself, not trying to halt him in any way. I am ever thankful."
sir James: (Some comment that shows his confusion about why she is thankful)
The comment about Cockburn is plagued with censoring. You have to write c**k-up.
See all the problems censorship leads to?
And will work on Octopussy's dialogue with 007 tomorrow.
Not sure what to do re the winged horse.
This is how I imagine Barbel and Number24 discuss the script
Can identify with that sketch.
http://www.mi6community.com/index.php?p=/discussion/17797/ye-spectre-from-the-ajb007-forum-with-permission
When Barbel and I cooperate there is much less swearing and friendliness.
Sir James gallops towards the circus astride his trusty steed, but is stopped by a lieutenant of the new territories' army.
Lieutenant: Romeo, Romeo, is that an Alpha, Romeo?
Sir James: Yes, repaired it has been since the Modicum of Comfort's PCS. Now, Prithee, lead me directly to the base commander.
Lieutenant: Sire, not while I'm on my watch.
Sir James: Then stand aside, lest thy trainers too be rent asunder for studying thy watch too long.
(With that Sir James departs at speed. Lieutenants search in vain, as Sir James hastily ducks into a travelling caravan, emerging moments later as a Jester. Sir James heads into the circus).
Sir James: Oh silvered winged man, is that cannon?
Silver winged man: No, sir James, 'tis by a most grievous continuation author so must not be considered canon. Pray ask the base commander yonder.
Base commander: Sir Jester! Is it you that's known as Thunderpu... Thunderpu...
Sir James: Nay, tis I, Sir James! Lady Octopussy (for I have no trouble with thine Scottish censorman), thrice-crossed thou hast been by Prince Kamal and General Orloff. A keg of gunpowder is moments from rendering this place asunder!
Sir James runs towards the keg as a melee ensues. He is seized upon, but the Lady Octopussy dismantles the cabinet into which the keg is fitted. Screams descend upon the crowd, followed by hush, as Sir James grapples with the fuse... the sweat from his brow snuffs the fuse like a candle at Vespers. (Whoever she may be.) Sir James and Lady Octopussy depart.
[Now at http://www.ajb007.co.uk/topic/47380/ajb-presents-william-shakespeares-james-bond-in/ Barbel]
Last bit below, all suggestions welcome!
[Now at http://www.ajb007.co.uk/topic/47380/ajb-presents-william-shakespeares-james-bond-in/ Barbel]
See http://www.ajb007.co.uk/post/866315/#p866315
Sir Miles: A simple enquiry, Naught Naught Seven: what ist thine intent?
Sir James: The killers I must find, for Lord Felix ist mine friend.
Sir Miles: Spare me such sentiment, in another country shouldst thee be.
Sir James: Nay, sire, the breaking point I have not reached.
Sir Miles: ‘Tis a farewell to arms for thee. The end of something this most surely ist.
Sir James: Nay, ‘tis the night before battle.
(Exit Sir James with his sword)
Sir Miles: There is no hunting like the hunting of man, and those who have hunted armed men long enough and liked it, never care for anything else thereafter.
Let's see who gets the references...
And Sharky, couldn't he simply be named "Not Quarrel"?
During the wedding, someone (Leiter?) should ask Bond why he's so intensely jolly. So much it almost seems creepy?
Bond replies that he senses he'll be non-stop angry for the short-time future, so he feels he should compensate.
In Act 2, Scene 1, Leiter says to Bond: -Think nothing of it, Sir James. You merely caught me looking guilty in the lone company of a very attractive young lady on my wedding day. Let us rejoin the party!
After they escape and ride off, Bond says they have to stop because their horses are out of hay need to stap to graze.
Bouvier: "Out of hay?" I haven't heard that one since I was a virgin ...
Oh I love that last one, it's definitely going in!
Opium smuggler, brilliant- that's spot on.
Re Sharky- I rather like the different ways of saying "Not Quarrel", as a running joke.
Act 3, Scene 1: (Stage directions.) In the house of a great Bard, but not the greatest.