Love Hurts - A Poem By Scott Murray
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Hello,
Just thought I would post this here, it is a poem I have just written, It is a sort of rhyming couplets based on how I was feeling today, although some of the words etc. used are a bit of an extreme compared to what I am feeling. it is quite cheesy in some areas, also some may find it a tad depressing...
Oh and try and spot the James bond quotes.
Here goes nothing:
Tell me what you think...
Just thought I would post this here, it is a poem I have just written, It is a sort of rhyming couplets based on how I was feeling today, although some of the words etc. used are a bit of an extreme compared to what I am feeling. it is quite cheesy in some areas, also some may find it a tad depressing...
Oh and try and spot the James bond quotes.
Here goes nothing:
Love Hurts, Deal With It!
By Scott Murray
What do I do, when she doesn't know i'm there?
I can't move a single muscle, all I can do is stare.
Looking into nothing-ness, staring into space.
Motionless and speechless, a blank look upon my face.
I'm sitting here exposed, I have no armour left,
you stripped it from me, you tore it from my chest!
I long to tell you, tell you how I feel.
I can't, I musn't! You'll think it's no big deal.
But it is! Believe me! i'm physically in pain!
Although to you this means nothing, not a loss nor a gain.
Life is full of small challenges, it's about opening up new doors.
So however life unfolds for you, remember darling, im yours!
I want to lean and kiss you, but you'll only push me back.
And it will take a lifetime, to put my life on track.
Is it a sin, is it wrong for me to touch you?
If it is then I am guilty, and my punishment is due.
It is cruel the way this taunts me, I wish that it would stop,
but it won't, it can't, it is chained to me, and bound by key and lock!
I think i'm going to go now, to sort out my aching head,
I really cannot handle this, to you i'm as good as dead!
Love Hurts, Deal With It...
By Scott Murray
What do I do, when she doesn't know i'm there?
I can't move a single muscle, all I can do is stare.
Looking into nothing-ness, staring into space.
Motionless and speechless, a blank look upon my face.
I'm sitting here exposed, I have no armour left,
you stripped it from me, you tore it from my chest!
I long to tell you, tell you how I feel.
I can't, I musn't! You'll think it's no big deal.
But it is! Believe me! i'm physically in pain!
Although to you this means nothing, not a loss nor a gain.
Life is full of small challenges, it's about opening up new doors.
So however life unfolds for you, remember darling, im yours!
I want to lean and kiss you, but you'll only push me back.
And it will take a lifetime, to put my life on track.
Is it a sin, is it wrong for me to touch you?
If it is then I am guilty, and my punishment is due.
It is cruel the way this taunts me, I wish that it would stop,
but it won't, it can't, it is chained to me, and bound by key and lock!
I think i'm going to go now, to sort out my aching head,
I really cannot handle this, to you i'm as good as dead!
Love Hurts, Deal With It...
Tell me what you think...
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Comments
I'm ' sit' ting ' here ' ex ' posed ' I ' have ' no ' ar ' mor ' left (12 syllables; 4 stressed--here, posed, armor--and 8 unstressed)
you ' stript ' it' from ' me ' you ' tore ' it ' from ' my ' chest (11 syllables, all unstressed)
Line six lacks a real beat, so it doesn't make much of an impression. Try reading the poem out loud and feel how the words come out of your mouth and diaphragm: that might illustrate what I'm talking about.
Still, a very nice job. And I like the Bond quotes!