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Topic: Operation Vengeance - my Bond25 script

Hi all,

*UPDATE 13 JUNE *

Sorry anyone trying to read the script but the free trial period for that other website expired on the hosting site.

So, I took out a 30-day free trial with Scribd. You can view the script here.
https://www.scribd.com/document/4654672 … v-01142019

You can embed it in a webpage with this HTML text.
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*UPDATE 13 JUNE *


Here is a Docsend.com link which allows anyone to view the PDF of a script I wrote between late 2016 and the start of 2019.
https://docsend.com/view/ktntpssykn23tp7d

As an amateur screenplay writer I am always interested in constructive criticism of anything I write.

I had a gut feeling after SPECTRE that they would continue with the same characters. It's a shame Mr Hinx is not back for NTTD.

So, I offer my script to you all, to view, I hope you enjoy it. Nasty comments will be ignored, constructive criticism might be commented on.

You can view it but not download it as I would not want an unscrupulous person to remove the title page and then play merry hell with NTTD script claims.

On a more positive note, with many months still to go before we get to see NTTD, I hope Operation Vengeance will satisfy your need for fresh James Bond content.

Please put any comments regarding specific plot points in a spoiler box so anyone perusing the thread can go on to read the script without any surprises being ruined.

I looked through ajb007 and could not see a dedicated script discussion group, maybe I missed it. I only found disparate posts referring to script plot and development.

To save Barbel from any legal wrangles I add the following; which is also on the title page of the screenplay.

This screenplay takes characters from the 2015 EON Productions film "SPECTRE" and continues their story.

There are characters in this screenplay who are owned exclusively by Danjaq LLC and, or EON Productions, as far as Someone is aware.

No copyright infringement is intended. This is a work of fan fiction.

The screenplay is intended for educational purposes and is being made freely available to the reader for that reason. It can be photocopied, or its contents divulged to any third party. It can not be sold. Please accord with the utmost care.

This screenplay does not claim to be a recreation of the forthcoming 25th James Bond film, NO TIME TO DIE. Any similarities in the stories are entirely coincidental.

OPERATION VENGEANCE's screenplay was completed in January 2019.

Last edited by Someone (13th Jun 2020 10:27)

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I'd like to read it, but I don't think I'll give Dropbox my e-mail contacts and bank account number to do so. Can I ask you to post your script somewhere else?

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Number24 wrote:

I'd like to read it, but I don't think I'll give Dropbox my e-mail contacts and bank account number to do so. Can I ask you to post your script somewhere else?

Ah. That's odd. I tested it with a pal and he had no problems. Let me find an alternative.

If anyone has any suggestions about where to host a 340kB file I'd appreciate it.

I have found a solution, I have just asked a couple of people to check that it works and then I'll post the link.

Last edited by Someone (27th May 2020 18:40)

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This link works, it's a Docsend.com link which allows anyone to view the PDF of a script for the next four weeks.
https://docsend.com/view/ktntpssykn23tp7d

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Pre-titles is brilliant. Sets the story up wonderfully. Very well done!
Love the little touches like the drop of red wine on the wedding dress and the confetti edging towards the drain.
Looking forward to reading the rest of your script over the next few days.
Well impressed and thank you.

Someone wrote:

Hi all,

NEW LINK!!

Here is a Docsend.com link which allows anyone to view the PDF of a script I wrote between late 2016 and the start of 2019.
https://docsend.com/view/ktntpssykn23tp7d

As an amateur screenplay writer I am always interested in constructive criticism of anything I write.

I had a gut feeling after SPECTRE that they would continue with the same characters. It's a shame Mr Hinx is not back for NTTD.

So, I offer my script to you all, to view, I hope you enjoy it. Nasty comments will be ignored, constructive criticism might be commented on.

You can view it but not download it as I would not want an unscrupulous person to remove the title page and then play merry hell with NTTD script claims.

On a more positive note, with many months still to go before we get to see NTTD, I hope Operation Vengeance will satisfy your need for fresh James Bond content.

Please put any comments regarding specific plot points in a spoiler box so anyone perusing the thread can go on to read the script without any surprises being ruined.

I looked through ajb007 and could not see a dedicated script discussion group, maybe I missed it. I only found disparate posts referring to script plot and development.

To save Barbel from any legal wrangles I add the following; which is also on the title page of the screenplay.

This screenplay takes characters from the 2015 EON Productions film "SPECTRE" and continues their story.

There are characters in this screenplay who are owned exclusively by Danjaq LLC and, or EON Productions, as far as Someone is aware.

No copyright infringement is intended. This is a work of fan fiction.

The screenplay is intended for educational purposes and is being made freely available to the reader for that reason. It can be photocopied, or its contents divulged to any third party. It can not be sold. Please accord with the utmost care.

This screenplay does not claim to be a recreation of the forthcoming 25th James Bond film, NO TIME TO DIE. Any similarities in the stories are entirely coincidental.

OPERATION VENGEANCE's screenplay was completed in January 2019.

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BetterMakeThatTwo wrote:

Pre-titles is brilliant. Sets the story up wonderfully. Very well done!
Love the little touches like the drop of red wine on the wedding dress and the confetti edging towards the drain.
Looking forward to reading the rest of your script over the next few days.
Well impressed and thank you.

Thanks Mum! [Only joking!]

I think foreshadowing is important in films, it helps to engage the audience and with the audience's expectations of an OHMSS remake for B25 I felt I could play with those expectations.

Of course, the difficult bit is the second act, so I'll be interested to hear where you think it is weak etc.

And any spoilerish comments in a spoiler box please.

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Sorry anyone trying to read the script but the free trial period expired on the hosting site. The script is not unavailable now.

I am looking for an alternate site.

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I have to say I really enjoyed reading your script. A solid effort!  ajb007/bond

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Number24 wrote:

I have to say I really enjoyed reading your script. A solid effort!  ajb007/bond

Thanks very much! From our mouths to God's (Barbara Broccoli) ears. ;-)

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I took out a 30-day free trial with Scribd. You can view the script here.
https://www.scribd.com/document/4654672 … v-01142019

You can embed it in a webpage with this text.
<p  style="   margin: 12px auto 6px auto;   font-family: Helvetica,Arial,Sans-serif;   font-style: normal;   font-variant: normal;   font-weight: normal;   font-size: 14px;   line-height: normal;   font-size-adjust: none;   font-stretch: normal;   -x-system-font: none;   display: block;"   ><a title="View Operation Vengeance Jame Bond 007 v.01142019 on Scribd" href="https://www.scribd.com/document/465467217/Operation-Vengeance-Jame-Bond-007-v-01142019#from_embed"  style="text-decoration: underline;">Operation Vengeance Jame Bo...</a> by <a title="View Some One's profile on Scribd" href="https://www.scribd.com/user/515487421/Some-One#from_embed"  style="text-decoration: underline;">Some One</a> on Scribd</p><iframe class="scribd_iframe_embed" title="Operation Vengeance Jame Bond 007 v.01142019" src="https://www.scribd.com/embeds/465467217/content?start_page=1&view_mode=scroll&access_key=key-kBhraxbALRZ8q0dZU9Sf" data-auto-height="true" data-aspect-ratio="0.7080062794348508" scrolling="no" width="100%" height="600" frameborder="0"></iframe>

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Long time lurker, first time poster. I actually created my account to respond to this threat and your script in particular.

Very well done. I'm a professional writer who does his own spy series (not self-published) and I really like your economical style and the opening lines do the job of grabbing attention. The rest of the script holds that attention. I enjoyed it a lot.

I can only encourage your further efforts. You've certainly got the knack; I hope you go on to create your own fantastic characters in whichever genre you end up playing in.

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Welcome to AJB  ajb007/bond

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WaltherPPKFan wrote:

Long time lurker, first time poster. I actually created my account to respond to this threat and your script in particular.

Very well done. I'm a professional writer who does his own spy series (not self-published) and I really like your economical style and the opening lines do the job of grabbing attention. The rest of the script holds that attention. I enjoyed it a lot.

I can only encourage your further efforts. You've certainly got the knack; I hope you go on to create your own fantastic characters in whichever genre you end up playing in.

Thanks WaltherPPKfan, really appreciate it. If you have any criticisms I would like to hear those, it's the best way to improve.

I have to admit I have copied the economical style of Purvis & Wade, which is similar to other script writers. It's the degree to which they use strong adjectives for description and provide insight into the thoughts of the characters that generally sets different screen writers apart. Haggis provides an insight into characters' thoughts while P&W, for Bond at least, don't.

I am writing an expanded version of Quantum of Solace, extending the film to a 2h 20min script length. I will be posting that on AJB once it is done. It will take a few months I think.

I have got some non-Bond stuff on the go, but that won't be shown here.

And, yes, welcome to AJB.

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I write novels so I don't know much about screenplays or where any weak spots may be in terms of that format, but the story was well done and the characterizations were good, and that's all I ever ask for so you nailed that. If I had one nit to pick, it would be the use of somebody's full name in dialog, especially on the first page, where it's done a lot. I understand we need to identify who's who, but having Blofeld speak Mallory's full name and rank, then his own name to Tanner, could be cut. We know who these people are, or can learn shortly after. Data dumps and expo dumps are like SMERSH assassins--they should be killed on sight.

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WaltherPPKFan wrote:

I write novels so I don't know much about screenplays or where any weak spots may be in terms of that format, but the story was well done and the characterizations were good, and that's all I ever ask for so you nailed that. If I had one nit to pick, it would be the use of somebody's full name in dialog, especially on the first page, where it's done a lot. I understand we need to identify who's who, but having Blofeld speak Mallory's full name and rank, then his own name to Tanner, could be cut. We know who these people are, or can learn shortly after. Data dumps and expo dumps are like SMERSH assassins--they should be killed on sight.

Thanks for that feedback, really appreciated.

The reason for that dialogue in the prison van was, my thinking was to write a script that they could conceivably shoot for B25 and Blofeld might be played by a different actor so you need to re-establish that that is Blofeld.

And with Mallory's rank, this was all to explain that the b-plot of Spectre, the merger of MI6 with something else due to business having too big a role in govt, which was a corruption, had not been resolved and in Op Vengeance you are seeing the latter stages of that merger process and the double-o section was still shutdown; issues that are all resolved by the end of the story.

I agree both Mallory's rank and who Blofeld is could have been addressed separately.

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Someone wrote:
WaltherPPKFan wrote:

I write novels so I don't know much about screenplays or where any weak spots may be in terms of that format, but the story was well done and the characterizations were good, and that's all I ever ask for so you nailed that. If I had one nit to pick, it would be the use of somebody's full name in dialog, especially on the first page, where it's done a lot. I understand we need to identify who's who, but having Blofeld speak Mallory's full name and rank, then his own name to Tanner, could be cut. We know who these people are, or can learn shortly after. Data dumps and expo dumps are like SMERSH assassins--they should be killed on sight.

Thanks for that feedback, really appreciated.

The reason for that dialogue in the prison van was, my thinking was to write a script that they could conceivably shoot for B25 and Blofeld might be played by a different actor so you need to re-establish that that is Blofeld.

And with Mallory's rank, this was all to explain that the b-plot of Spectre, the merger of MI6 with something else due to business having too big a role in govt, which was a corruption, had not been resolved and in Op Vengeance you are seeing the latter stages of that merger process and the double-o section was still shutdown; issues that are all resolved by the end of the story.

I agree both Mallory's rank and who Blofeld is could have been addressed separately.

I get it. We all do that stuff. But that was the only nit pick I had so you're doing fine. I found an old ms. of mine tonight while going through some files, and it has red ink all over it for corrections and this and that and all the goofs a young writer makes.

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FYI the 30-day free trial I took out with Scribd ends tomorrow (12 July) or Monday (13 July), I don't know if they include the 13th as the 30th day of the free trial.

Until then, you can view the Operation Vengeance script here.
https://www.scribd.com/document/4654672 … v-01142019

Last edited by Someone (11th Jul 2020 10:40)

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I had two email alerts yesterday that there were attempts to download the script from this Scribd account.

It has not functioned for some time and will not do so. It was time limited access for readers' feedback only.

Sorry.

Once NTTD is out I might make the script available.

Someone wrote:

Hi all,

*UPDATE 13 JUNE *

Sorry anyone trying to read the script but the free trial period for that other website expired on the hosting site.

So, I took out a 30-day free trial with Scribd. You can view the script here.
https://www.scribd.com/document/4654672 … v-01142019

You can embed it in a webpage with this HTML text.
<p  style="   margin: 12px auto 6px auto;   font-family: Helvetica,Arial,Sans-serif;   font-style: normal;   font-variant: normal;   font-weight: normal;   font-size: 14px;   line-height: normal;   font-size-adjust: none;   font-stretch: normal;   -x-system-font: none;   display: block;"   ><a title="View Operation Vengeance Jame Bond 007 v.01142019 on Scribd" href="https://www.scribd.com/document/465467217/Operation-Vengeance-Jame-Bond-007-v-01142019#from_embed"  style="text-decoration: underline;">Operation Vengeance Jame Bo...</a> by <a title="View Some One's profile on Scribd" href="https://www.scribd.com/user/515487421/Some-One#from_embed"  style="text-decoration: underline;">Some One</a> on Scribd</p><iframe class="scribd_iframe_embed" title="Operation Vengeance Jame Bond 007 v.01142019" src="https://www.scribd.com/embeds/465467217/content?start_page=1&view_mode=scroll&access_key=key-kBhraxbALRZ8q0dZU9Sf" data-auto-height="true" data-aspect-ratio="0.7080062794348508" scrolling="no" width="100%" height="600" frameborder="0"></iframe>

*UPDATE 13 JUNE *


Here is a Docsend.com link which allows anyone to view the PDF of a script I wrote between late 2016 and the start of 2019.
https://docsend.com/view/ktntpssykn23tp7d

As an amateur screenplay writer I am always interested in constructive criticism of anything I write.

I had a gut feeling after SPECTRE that they would continue with the same characters. It's a shame Mr Hinx is not back for NTTD.

So, I offer my script to you all, to view, I hope you enjoy it. Nasty comments will be ignored, constructive criticism might be commented on.

You can view it but not download it as I would not want an unscrupulous person to remove the title page and then play merry hell with NTTD script claims.

On a more positive note, with many months still to go before we get to see NTTD, I hope Operation Vengeance will satisfy your need for fresh James Bond content.

Please put any comments regarding specific plot points in a spoiler box so anyone perusing the thread can go on to read the script without any surprises being ruined.

I looked through ajb007 and could not see a dedicated script discussion group, maybe I missed it. I only found disparate posts referring to script plot and development.

To save Barbel from any legal wrangles I add the following; which is also on the title page of the screenplay.

This screenplay takes characters from the 2015 EON Productions film "SPECTRE" and continues their story.

There are characters in this screenplay who are owned exclusively by Danjaq LLC and, or EON Productions, as far as Someone is aware.

No copyright infringement is intended. This is a work of fan fiction.

The screenplay is intended for educational purposes and is being made freely available to the reader for that reason. It can be photocopied, or its contents divulged to any third party. It can not be sold. Please accord with the utmost care.

This screenplay does not claim to be a recreation of the forthcoming 25th James Bond film, NO TIME TO DIE. Any similarities in the stories are entirely coincidental.

OPERATION VENGEANCE's screenplay was completed in January 2019.